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Comment on this short story here, or if you haven't yet read it you can do so by going to: A Place for the Night
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« Reply #1 on Oct 27, 2008, 1:41am » | |
I thought this was excellent but where's the rest...I have so many questions.
What happened to them?
Who are they?
I must also say I loved the way you captured the way the mother (I assume) is the one who always makes the sacrifices and has the responisbilities.
Brilliant.
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« Reply #2 on Oct 29, 2008, 2:21am » | |
I liked the story and I liked that it left questions, it means that you can fill in the blanks and imagine the rest.
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« Reply #3 on Nov 17, 2008, 1:31am » | |
To be honest I don't think this works as a short story. I think it seems too much like one part of a larger work.
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« Reply #4 on Mar 3, 2009, 8:28am » | |
Honesty is always best Martin. I thank you for it. I supose in some respects everything a person writes is part of a longer work. Every poem is really the same poem, every story the same story.
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« Reply #5 on Mar 5, 2009, 2:54pm » | |
I enjoyed this story . The plot demands the imagination of the reader. It has a flavour of ' The War of the Worlds' about it, although much of the mystery is left to personal interpretation . The same applies to the ending . We can assume that as she is the narrator , she was three tablets short of a suicide. Or was she?. Nice one for a magazine maybe.
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« Reply #6 on May 3, 2009, 7:59am » | |
I loved this story, seemed complete to me and made me cry. Liked its darkness. Presume she died slowly in the end. Reminded me of the end of Hitler when the family of (is it Himmler or Goebbels?) are given cyanide.
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