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« Thread Started on Nov 13, 2008, 8:49pm » | ![[Quote]](http://s2.images.proboards.com/buttons/quote.gif "[Quote]") |
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« Reply #1 on Nov 20, 2008, 11:27am » | |
Very good story that builds up extremely well. The start was/is a little too slow for my liking, to begin I was dreading reading the whole piece but it is very well written.
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« Reply #2 on Nov 22, 2008, 3:36am » | |
I love it you can just imagine being in that situation, nobody likes the dentist and for so many it's a big fear so it's a well chosen idea.
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« Reply #3 on Mar 15, 2009, 6:59pm » | |
Hi Martine, Thanks for reading my story, and your kind comments.
Regards,
Julie
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« Reply #4 on Mar 15, 2009, 7:03pm » | |
Nov 20, 2008, 11:27am, Jack Murrayfield wrote:| Very good story that builds up extremely well. The start was/is a little too slow for my liking, to begin I was dreading reading the whole piece but it is very well written. |
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I'm not sure if I'm doing this right, but I'd just like to thank you Jack for the feedback on my story Obsession.
Do you think I should cut down the first two or three paragraphs?
Regards,
Julie
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« Reply #5 on Mar 23, 2010, 6:23pm » | |
Hello Julie,
I loved your story, I'm a screenwriter/director - I'd love to speak to you in private about possibly turning your story into a short film - if you're interested email me at
oomphproductions(at)gmail.com
Luke Baldwin-Smith
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